Monday, November 7, 2016

20th blog post:Literacy

Hey guy's!!!Today I'm going to be talking about my literacy.We have been doing lots of it and I'm going to show you my best piece.The name is called the abandoned castle and it took me quit a while because I wanted to put in everything I saw in my head.This will come with the plan I did about it (with success criteria):

Success Criteria
  • Use the Writing Process (Get Ready, Craft, Revising, Editing, Sharing)
  • Structure your narrative through your plan
  • Begins with orientation (setting and main character)
  • Paint a picture with words (descriptive words and actions)
  • Paragraphs (Orientation / Events x3 / Resolution - Ending)
  • My writing goal:To really get the reader never want to stop reading  

              The abandoned castle

       Hey guys and welcome back to my blog!I’m Samantha.Ann (but you can call me Sam),and today,my blog is going to be about me,my life and this spooky place I just discovered.Right,about my life,I’m very shy at times and a have a really cool friend Lizzy(hi Lizzy!)She one of the best people in the world that girl,she can really keep me company with her “talking”.We’ve known each other for five year’s and meet at the horse stable’s in town.(We love the horse’s and became friends working there)Gotta go,I’m getting creeped out just sitting here typing on my laptop.More soon!
Sam packed away her laptop and set of,willing to find more to blog about.Even though she kept feeling like she was being followed,she was moving forward.Her legs started to shake with fear.The cold icy breeze blew across her face.She was in a forest,filled  with mist and fog.

Sam was a blogger and she wanted to blog about this.It seemed interesting and she thought people would to like to read about it.As she walked forward,she saw red eye’s all around.She started running.Sam screamed as she tripped over some tree root’s...she got up just in time but never got to see what that thing looked like.But one odd thing is that something came falling down on her.It was sticky and fuzzy,like a giant hair ball!

Anyway,Sam came into a clearing.She froze looking at the sight,forgetting all about what she was running from.It was a dark castle,with lightning all around the castle. Sam decided to go inside.As she opened the door,Boom!Crash!Bang!Bash!Meow!,she fell into the darkness.When Sam opened her eye’s,Her arms were in chain’s.She saw that she was in a small,dark room with a door on the other side.She tried to get free as she started to hear things such as roar’s and bat noises.

Meanwhile,her friend Lizzy was following her trying to see where she was going.Lizzy was very concerned  about her friend.She saw something coming towards her,when it came into a clearing,it looked like a human shape.when they were about a meter apart,Lizzy froze with fear in disbelief as she saw what was in front of her.She had black hair,long sleeved black top,grey leggings,black slip on shoes and fang’s.(Oh,by the fang part,you must know what this is)”Your a vampire!”Lizzy cried.”Yea,yea,I get that a lot,but I come harmless”Said the vampire “I’m Elizabeth and I’m here to tell you about  your sister”Elizabeth said.”She’s not my sister,but she sure does act like one!She’s my best friend and I need to help if she’s in trouble.”Lizzy replied.”My father,the cousin of my uncle Dracula,thought that she was the beast that’s been hunting us down for the past three years,his name is fang and he has a lot of red eyes if you’ve seen him.Even though he’s only three years old,his really vicious.”Elizabeth explained as she was looking around,like she was looking for this beast.”Actually,I have seen this Fang.She or he was trying to get my friend but she got away quickly after tripping over a tree root,it was a bad sight”Lizzy explained.”Oh no,now that fang know’s who she is,he’ll try to hunt her down!”Elizabeth said,trying to signal Lizzy to come with her to her home,so they can get Samantha out of the dungeon.As they got there,they ran down the hill that led to the doorway.They opened the door and Elizabeth told Lizzy to step back with her as mist and fog came flowing out of the door.A figure came out of the door.”Who dare’s to enter my home?”Said another vampire,Elizabeth's dad.”Hi daddy!”Elizabeth said loudly.”Oh,hello my little vampire!”Elizabeth’s dad said.So much for a 9000 year old.Lizzy thought as she saw Elizabeth and her dad.(Elizabeth is 9000 year’s old)

Meanwhile,Samantha was once again on her blog,since that is the only thing she could find to do,while it was still charged.
So through this spooky forest like place,I got chased by a monster with lot’s of red eyes and found this castle and now I’m stuck in a dungeon in that castle.My arms are in chains and I have know idea how I got here,but I kept feeling that I was being followed by someone or something as I came here.Anyway,I’m rally exited to bog about this place,but I can’t get free from these chain’s!(If I had a super power right now,it would be the power of super strength or laser eyes so then I can get free from these thing’s!).Well,I think that’s all the info for now,so blog more soon!

Sam hit the send button.I wonder how I’m going to get out of these things.I mean,it may be impossible,but it’s worth a shot. She thought.As she struggled,she got out her cell (actually it’s her mum’s because she lent it to her in case she needed help throughout her blogging adventure)and called Lizzy(Lizzy’s mum did the same thing).Sam(on the phone):Were are you!I’m stuck in this dungeon with chains on my arm’s inside this spooky castle on the other side of this spooky forest filled with mist and fog!!!Help,please!(paint).Lizzy on the phone:Um,I’m in a spooky forest and made a friend.Well,actually,I’m probably by hat castle your stuck in.No worries. My new friend’s dad own’s this place.She’s a vampire!How cool is that? Sam,on the phone:Yea,yea,enough with the fib’s,just get me out of here! Lizzy on the phone:I’ll prove to you  she’s a vampire.She said she’s 9000 years old!I’m not telling fibs.Besides,she has fangs! Sam,on the phone:Are we worried about a vampire who's already dead,or about someone who could be soon!!! Lizzy on the phone:Okay,we’ll come and get you out of there,but,I’m not lying.I’ll show you when she get’s there.Bye!!!

They hung up.On the Lizzy half of the story,Elizabeth’s dad put her down and asked “Who’s this little bite?” Elizabeth’s replied with “It’s cool,dad. Obviously you trapped her friend instead of fang”Elizabeth replied.”Okay let's get her out of there”He answered.As they went inside,Lizzy was getting a bit creeped out.”I’m scared“she said.”Elizabeth,how about you take her to your room while I get her friend?”Elizabeth’s dad asked.”Sure”Elizabeth said.As her dad was walking toward’s the dungeon. He got out the key for the chain’s and went in.Of course,Sam was sitting there gloomily.waiting for someone to rescue her.”You are a vampire!”She shouted.No,well yes,I am,but your friend here wanted me to get you out because I thought you were the best who has been hunting us down”.Elizabeth’s dad replied.”Well get on with it!”Sam said.He got her out and too her to Elizabeth’s room,were Elizabeth and Lizzy were,Lizzy telling her what Sam looked like and acted like.

“Lizzy!”She ran up to her and gave her a big hug.She was so excited to see her.”Now what do we do?”Sam asked.”Let’s go hunt down Fang!”Elizabeth declared.”Yea!”They all shouted.They went out the castle and went to were Fang lived.(In a cave).Sam heard little noises such as:”bla bla bla”.When they got to the cave,Sam and Lizzy realised how big it was,they were too scared to run away.”He’s snoring”Elizabeth said.”That’s good.I’ll go suck his blood”Elizabeth’s dad said.He went up to Fang...ROAR!!!Fang woke up and started to chase them all.”Wait!”Elizabeth said while running.”Fang is only 3 years old,isn’t he,and act’s like a dog,doesn’t he?”Since she was right,her dad nodded.”Fang,stop!”Elizabeth said.”Roar?”Fang said as if it was his version of saying “What?”.”Sit!”Elizabeth said.Fang obeyed.”Go home!”He looked in confusion,and then realised what she said.He obeyed again.”And don’t come back,or you’ll get a smack!”She finished.And then Fang whimpered like a dog all the way home.”Yea!”They all shouted and gave eachother a high five.So Sam had a sleepover at Lizzy’s that night,and Elizabeth’s dad tought her how to fly!How ever,in the cave,fang was making a plan to capture the vampires and humans...

                To be continued…

here is the plan I made for it:

My Narrative Plan

Main Character:
Samantha (call her Sam)
Age:9 yrs old
Light green eye’s
Straight,long,                brownish blondish hair
She wear’s:
Two hair-braid’s that connect at the back,blue and green choker,Brooklyn 89 blue and white short sleeved shirt,plain white shorts and purple and green trainer’s
Other Characters:
(with Personality / Actions)
Best,best friends with April
Always talk non-stop
8 yr old
Light blue eye’s
Brown hair
Purple shirt pink leggings blue trainer’s.
Love’s tomato juice Becomes friends with Lizzy
Shy and quiet ,Really smart
9000 year old,red,black hair
Black long sleeved top,grey leggings,black slip on shoes,fang’s
Elizabeth's Dad
Ruler of dark castle
Willing to take risks and really loud!
30,0000 yr old,brown hair,cousin’s with Dracula,black and red top,dramatic cape,long black tights,pointy tap dancing-like shoe’s,fang’s
Basicly just a big hair ball with big sharp jaw’s
Priority is to hunt down vampire kind
3 yrs old(and really dumb!)


Get’s stuck in a dungeon in a dark palace she find’s to blog about on the other side of the dark wood’s full of monster’s.There is one kind of monster out there that is trying to hunt down Elizabeth and her dad...

Lizzy follows April in a long distance and meet’s Elizabeth.Elizabeth live’s there and know’s all the trick’s to get to the dungeon.Elizabeth’s dad trapped April so they try to stop him.In the end they realized it was all a mistake because there was a monster in the wood’s who try’s to hunt them down,they all get together and stop the monster.
Dark wood’s:
Mysterious,misty,dark, curious,spooky

Dark palace:
Scary,spooky,lightning, stormy

Personality /Actions:
Some days shy and quiet,some days she talks a lot.She has a BFF called Lizzy.
They all get together after rescuing April and having a big discussion with Elizabeth’s dad and THEY hunt down the monster,Fang.

So I really hope you liked my story,the abandoned castle,and I showed that to you so you know how my writing is going so far.I thought I really liked it and it was really descriptive.So that is basiclly it for my litracy blog,but the last word will be...



  1. Amazing piece of writing Naomi. I like you creative thinking. You got me interested right from the start.
    Well done!

  2. well done naomi you did an amazing job and the tittle really hooked me up with your story and the plan that you mad told me who the people where and what they looked like so I think you did a good job on that.

  3. I loved the deaital in your story it really got a picture in my head and it was a really cool picture and I hope there is a second one of the abandon house. well done.
    P.S Anika.