Tuesday, April 11, 2017

Writing:a special place

Hi everyone welcome back to my blog!Today I am going to be showing you my special place writing. For this we had to choose a special place and write about it. I think I did some pretty good describing.My special place was my little sister Sienna's graveyard. Here is my writing>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>  >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>


Purpose: to inform
WALT describe with clear and interesting details
Success Criteria
  • Quick plan to prepare for the writing task (brainstorm with words or ideas)
  • Interesting beginning and ending
  • Using the senses (see, touch, hear, smell)
  • Includes strong descriptive words (adjectives)
  • Uses the present tense



         My little sister Sienna’s graveyard
I look around the graveyard and finally see my sister’s grave,with the pink and purple cross that me,my brother and my other sister painted. Behind that cross was another  big brown cross with some ribbon tied around it into a bow. Below the crosses were some extraordinary fake flowers so they would stay alive and never go brown and die. The flower’s glistened in the sunlight as I looked to the side to see my Aunty Tangiora who died in September,just before I was born. To the right was my great grandfather Joe.If you look far out there is a beautiful sight of Hastings. The street lights shimmered in the moonlight and at day the road glistened in the sun light. The flower’s still haven't been rearranged as I keep asking dad to because they kept getting leave’s blown on them. Guess i’ll have to wait for her birthday. But all the windmill’s made everything more colorful. The ribbon flew around playfully and danced in the wind. The view was a never ending sensational sight.





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8 comments:

  1. Great Naomi you have use lots of words to describe the grave. Her grave sounds like it is really pretty and colourful much more pretty than my grandma's!

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  2. Wow Your story got me thinking about my sister

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  3. wow Naomi this is the best writing I have seen so far

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  4. is this real im sorry but anyway it sounds pretty

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  5. wow that is sad I'm sad that happened

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