Wednesday, June 29, 2016


Whats up? Today I'm going to show you my My iProud of my free choice writing. I love the part when the guitar's turn into chocolate. If you want to know what I mean by guitars turning into chocolate, read my iProud. I really,really,REALLY hope you...............................


My Best Learning

This is my free choice writing. I am proud of this because I think think I’ve worked my hardest and put in my personal best.

My biggest challenge was getting it done in time and getting all the info from my head.
Success Criteria (Sentence formation has been our main focus)
Content & Ideas
Include a range of ideas with clear details.
Sentence Formation
  • Include simple, compound and complex sentences
  • Start most of my sentences with different words
Choose words and language features to meet my purpose.
Clear beginning, middle and end with paragraphs.
My best spelling with good attempts at words I don’t know.
Use all basic punctuation (capital letters, full stops, question marks and exclamation marks) correctly and attempt some complex punctuation.
                                                 The unusual play-date

It was a sunny Sunday and I, Naomi, was looking out of Leila’s window.My eye’s were squinting.Watching from side to side of the rood,I was as quite as a ladybug.

It was 11.35.and 21 second’s when...wooooooooooohoooooo!!!She’s here she’s here she’s here she’s here!I quickly put on my shoe’s and hurried out the door and down the driveway.There was a grayish blue car and out of it came my B.F.F Jessica.

We ran up the driveway while my mum and Jessica’s mum walked up slowly chatting to each other.When we got inside our mum’s were trailing behind us like snail’s.Jessica had salt and vinegar chips and m&m afghan's in her hand.I said just to chuck them on the table.
She looked at her notepad and she told me the first thing we were going to do was play our guitar’s.Me and Jessica were terribly hungry but we like to stay on schedule.We started to play when we thought our guitar’s were made of chocolate!We gazed for a long time.

Just then there was a tad change.The six string’s faded into lickrish!We were too astonished to take a bite.When our guitar’s were back to normal,we carried on practicing for Mr.Write (we went on Friday's all 2015 in his class to practice).It was about 11.55 and 2 second’s when we  put our guitar’s away.

It was so weird and annoying when we saw our mum’s still chatting to each other.Jessica said:mum,mum,mum,go away NOW!She said not whispering but quietly.After that she whispered in her mum’s ear:This is MY play-date,not your’s.leave now.You have ten second’s starting now.Ten,nine,eight,seven,six,five,four,three,two one.She finished when her mum was gone.

The next thing on Jessica’s list was dancing in my room.The music came from my radio.We went into my room once again and I turned on my radio and put in a CD we liked to dance to.Our dancing time is up!I said at 12.15.

We went back to check what was on the list.But as soon as we saw my mum ,it looked like she was  made of sweet’s!!!I finally said:We have to fix this!So we thought and we thought and we thought.But nothing came to our head’s.We looked around the house.And when we came to the table,we saw the food.It looked like it was glowing to us.

So there was our thought.We opened the packet’s and scoffed everything,even the crums. It only took us five minutes and we have finished two large packets of chips and one whole packet of m&m afghan’s!

Mum,I fell sick.I said in a moaning voice.Go and watch a movie with Jessica then.That should calm you down.Mum said.Have you seen the movie Paranorman?No.Jessica replied.So we watched and watched through the whole thing.

I went to mum and gave her a hug while saying:That made me fell much better.But I fell like i’m going to vomite. She said.Go watch a movie then.I said firmly.

After that,We HAD to do our dance.But as we walked closer to my room with curios look’s on our faces,we herd a sound that went like this: Shake it of, shake it of, of of.Oh shake it of,shake it of,of of.It was the voice of Talor Swift.We carefully opened the door and….Leila and Ollie were dancing!Leila was doing the lawn mower and Ollie was cutely(for a three year old)was doing the sprinkler!Me and Jessica have seen lot’s of weird things lately so all we did was join in and have a load of fun.

                                      The End

So that was my iProud. Hope you enjoyed!

I hope you liked my post.I see you next time!
P.S:I am having other writing ideas like this on other iProud's for my blog!    

: O M G!!!(AM I RIGHT!)(HE HE!!!)

Wednesday, June 1, 2016

Mya's B-day party

Hey guy's and now i'm going to tell you about my first soccer game and Mya Wallace  b-day.Mum said if I try really hard at soccer I can go to Mya's b-day. At soccer it was very foggy when we arrived. We waited for our coach and when he was there we started practicing some skills before the game.

We did not win but mum said I did well enough to go to Mya's party.We got her a star war's bop-it.When we bought the present,we went home and got dressed into my rock star out-fit, did my hair and put on my make-up. When we started heading in to town we looked for Mya's house and then we found it.

There was a red carpet and Mya's dad was checking if I was on the guest list.He found my name and let me in. Inside was a disco ball and another red carpet. The back had a photo both and some mini mask's on a stick.There was a pink table wher the lunch going to be  layed out. 

We had a dance and Isabella was chasing me.down the red carpet me and Skyla walked down it together laughing.When the food came out Bella Casson arrived and had some lollies chip's,cheerio's,sausage roll's and fizzy. Then we had a game to see who could keep there holla-hoop up and I won out of all the winner's (who were three year six girl's).We played a few other game's had a dance of, played statue's  had a dance with our friend's until the dinner came.

 We had delicious pizza for dinner and when we ate the rest of the pizza Mya Wallace's mum said that the first game of popping other people's balloon's was just a practice!!! so we had a real game and I was so close to winning but Khushi popped my balloon when I wasn't looking! I sat down and waited for the winner. I can't remember who it was but i'm sure it was a girl.

After that we played just dance 2016. The song that I dance to was fancy.After my turn I watched the other people have there turn until I saw mum. I got up and gave her a hug. Mya's mum gave
me a goody bag, I said thank- you and I walked out of the house.

 Dad quickly dropped by and  gave me mum's mother's day present's.They where flower's, chocolate and mum's fave: peanut m&m's.I hid them in her room early the next morning while she was asleep and she found them all when the day was lighter.

She loved all her present's and we made her breakfast in bed.We made her a delicious bagel.

I hope you liked my story about Mya's b-day party!I'm sure I'll get back to you soon!

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